Wednesday, November 2, 2011

I Am Triumphant!

After struggling for... oh... twenty minutes on the first paragraph of my NaNo novel, I finally have a beginning that I can work with! :D
Here it is:

 
The thick, metallic taste filled my mouth, and the smell of blood mingled with that of rubber and sweat. The sound of the crowd made it too loud to think, much less get my brother off of me.
“Three... Two...”
“Come on, Jade!”
“One.”
Burr shoved my face against the mat, and for the third time that day I blacked out.

It's not great.
But it's a rough draft.

Whaddya guys think?

5 comments:

Cat said...

Epic opening. Definitely one that intrigues! Good luck with NaNo!

The Lonesome Crayon said...

Twas pretty epic! :) Jade's awesome.

Sandy said...

That's totes awesome. I would def keep reading. /preppy language

O_o Um yeah... XD In all sincerity, I love that a lot. I really wanna know what's going on. :D

Jenna said...

I want to read it!! I want to read it!!
NANO BUDDY!!!! Cheers to us hopefully finishing our novels by the 30th!!! :D

Gabi said...

It sounds like my wrestling practices.